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Noumenon
21st Jan 2008, 12:32
I'm kicking my own backside up and down the "office" for not having a go at this. Amner is taking the opportunity seriously, but I think I would have liked to lock horns with Dan Brown and the rest of the jokers. I've been mildly re-obsessing over a serial killer thriller notion I came up with years ago, would make a great piece of holiday nonsense. For a lot of these submissions I think pulp success is the territory of wildest dreams, but I could be a real contender Charlie, if I switched off the logic side of my brain...I just wrote my first few chapters for fun, any takers?

SEE THE REAL

Chapter One



1 – Double Figures
Figano crept past another failed shape, no longer thinking about how familiar each one would be if it was only complete and how horrible they all were for being not so. Double Figures, he thought.

They were calling him The Freemason. Always with the nicknames. Sort of apt, though. Left eye closed (over an empty socket). Right breast bared (nipple removed, inserted into anus – sense of humour). Left trouser rolled up to knee (lower leg removed, whereabouts undetermined). Each one nailed upright by a raised right hand, with the ring finger pinned to the palm like a secret Masonic handshake. The Chief Commissioner had been having kittens for weeks, so either the killer was a member of the gang or had really done his homework. Four more in the nest to add to the six known victims. The press were going to love this. Assuming Figano didn’t end up a decorative statistic.

Except that would work too. Double Figures. Good thing he was armed.

The hex-shot was a marvel of ballistic technology. The magnetic chamber gave each of the needles a slight negative charge as they accelerated through their barrels, causing the seven outer ones to spread away from the central one. Fast and almost totally silent, each of the eight contained a dose of nerve agent that would only impede non-vital motor functions, so it didn’t matter how many hit the target or if an unfortunate bystander got in the way, and the super-low mass meant negligible damage to any potentially valuable material surroundings, like structurally significant walls or works of art. Figano was in a burnt out warehouse. He’d left the Hex in his armpit and drawn his Rosebud.

Figano ducked under a fallen beam and wondered what it would be like to have someone waiting back home for him and worrying about his welfare. Nice, probably. Better than having a partner along for the ride, worrying about both their welfares on the job and then getting violently perforated and entrusting last words to him in a blood-bubble. Again. That didn’t seem like much of a threat anymore though. No-one had volunteered after the last one... whatever his name was... went home in a cloud of smoke and a vase, and the Loot must have figured out that, a, Figano worked better alone and, b, there’d be more hands in the bull pen to do other vital police work if they all just left him to it.

He stopped moving at a sound from up ahead. It was dark; these things always seemed to go down after the sun does for some reason; dramatic effect most likely. The warehouse was partly open to the sky, little stars twinkling in the gaps gave away the bare ribs of the roof and shed just enough light to make out a smoke stained cluster of pre-fab office units along the far wall of the ruin. No movement though.

He eased up to the only obvious entrance and gingerly pushed the door open – it didn’t creak. Result. Halfway down the charcoaled corridor were two gaping doorways in each wall, plus what looked like a motivational chart stuck up on the dead end opposite, a pie chart over the word “excellence”. The top two had lights coming from them. Figano stepped over the jam and edged towards the doorways, careful not to drag his back against the wall, stretching palms and fingers against the Rosebud’s grip. He stopped with his shoulder against the first doorframe, able to see some way into the room opposite. The back wall and ceiling were burnt out, the floor a gritty looking lake that smelled of toilet. One down.

The noise was coming from the second door up on his side. Figano sighed. Sounds like dinner. He took a deep breath, then turned quickly into the doorway beside him, gun raised. Rosebud rounds come with a one-stop-shop guarantee – they look traditional, but each one is a precisely nested cluster of steel petals which spread open and break away on impact, shredding through the target like shrapnel. The perfect bullet: aim centre torso, the easiest shot, and just one will hollow your lucky winner out from front to back without seriously breaking the skin. Head shots and wings, though – messy. But impressive.

The room was empty, apart from another corporate poster. This one said “focus”. Assholes.

Figano moved up to the last two doorways. Closer now, he could hear another sound. An electric hum, coming from behind Non-Existent Door Four. Okay Barry, you grinning mother-fucker, Figano thought to himself in the cheerily psychotic voice-over voice of everyone’s favourite show, what have I won? He took the final step up to the second doorframe and the view into the lit room opposite. He stared at the mini-generator and the tasty selection slowly turning on the rotary roaster plugged in beside it. He’s a fucking Eater, Figano thought, almost disappointed. If it wasn’t for the glass cover on the damn thing he’d have known the minute he’d stuck his nose in the pre-fabs. Tip-toeing about, what a waste of time.

“Okay, fuck it!” he said, and stepped into the last room. The guy inside looked up in surprise, caught with the crispy skin of a shin pulled tight between his teeth, delicately holding the bare knee knuckle in one hand and a flaking black wingtip in the other. He jumped up with a snarl and came out around his desk, tossing his snack down on the pile of napkins and little sauce sachets under the angle poise.

Figano pulled the trigger and the Rosebud went boom. It hit “The Freemason” in the neck and blew his head off like a popped cork. It landed on its stump with an outraged look on his face, then to add insult to injury the decapitated body toppled forward and landed on it like a touchdown tackle.

Figano re-holstered the Rosebud in the small of his back. Easy pickings, yes, but it left a bad taste in the mouth. Eaters hardly register as human; no guile, just a straight line of mean. Odd that this one would go to so much trouble with the leftovers. He pulled his cam-phone and took a few evidential snaps prior to calling in, wandering back over to the “kitchen” for a better look while he waited to be connected – which is when he spotted the bonus prize, against the wall where he couldn’t be seen from the corridor.

The room was surprisingly well decorated, nice wall paper, expensive carpet showing thick muddy tracks from when the generator and cooker had been recently wheeled in, a display cabinet full of eyeballs in little glass jars – and a well-dressed corpse with a well-chewed throat, propped up on the comfortable sofa. None of The Freemason’s flashy trademarks, this was just meat waiting to be eaten. Figano shook his head, looking at what he felt confident was the real Freemason and feeling vaguely cheated.

“Looks like you picked the wrong one for number eleven, pal,” he muttered. Still. Double Figures.2 – THE BRONX CHEER – Fanning The Flames Since 1985VAMPIRE STAKED OUT
Double Play Cop Makes It 10 For 10

By Antonio Scrofa


USPD Special Detective Libero Figano came home in style last night after taking down the tenth confirmed serial killer of his career – but not the one he was expecting. Local troublemaker The Vampire, with five heavy neckings to his own gristly credit, lucked onto the trail of Society Serial The Freemason and had himself an impromptu buffet bar at the expense of the novelty murderer’s trophy collection - but the killer-times-two evidently bit off more than he could chew when Det. Figano routed the square at The Freemason’s hideout in Mott Haven’s abandoned industrial district.
Foot Patrol
The Freemason, now identified as Arthur James Ronaldson, 46, a former resident of Fieldston, Riverdale, was discovered partially cannibalised by Det. Figano following a bloody showdown with the killer’s killer. Noted for his more elitist ritualistic stylings, The Freemason’s most high profile victim was City Councillor Jack Petrenac who was discovered in the now familiar one-legged pose four days ago, prompting long-overdue special attention from local authorities.

Love Bites

Not known for his dancing, The Freemason’s ten left feet – including Petrenac’s remaining remains – were found in sit-chew with The Vampire, AKA Marcus Burrham, recently of Locust Point. A repeated internee of the State’s underfunded Forced Medical Facilities, Burrham was noted as “a great success” in doctor’s reports prior to his last release in 2012 and re-filed as “cured” after the 30-day non-readmission period. Demands for system review by victim families and support groups have been taken “under serious consideration” according to an FMF spokesperson.
Serial Pillar of the Community
Figano, who is to be decorated by Mayor Greg Spiggert later in the week, sprang from The Bronx’s Italian community and joined the former NYPD in the late 90s, but postings around the nation have since kept him away from home. Being granted the freedom of the city hopes are high we will see much more of him in action at the nation’s number one hotspot for serial slayings. Spiggert recently attempted to deflect attention from local occurrences, referring to the national epidemic as “America’s new hobby”, while President Samson allegedly “will be praying to God for an end to the madness”. (Editorial Pg 2)

Colyngbourne
21st Jan 2008, 12:44
Brilliant! V.v. good, a tick and a star as well.
More please!

Noumenon
21st Jan 2008, 12:47
Wow - that was quick! I was just about to add the start to Chapter Three as a taster, but I'll keep at it instead...

EDIT: I've revised my technology - paragraph four now reads:

The hex-shot was a marvel of ballistic technology. The magnetic chamber gave each of the needles a slight negative charge as they accelerated through their barrels, causing the seven outer ones to spread away from the central one. Fast and almost totally silent, each of the eight contained a dose of nerve agent that would only impede non-vital motor functions, so it didn’t matter how many hit the target or if an unfortunate bystander got in the way, and the super-low mass meant negligible damage to any potentially valuable material surroundings, like structurally significant walls or works of art. Figano was in a burnt out warehouse. He’d left the Hex in his armpit and drawn his Rosebud.Ta amner!

amner
21st Jan 2008, 12:48
That's superb, Nou. And what a great ear for newspaper tabloid-speke US-style, you have!

Noumenon
22nd Jan 2008, 17:14
3 – In the Hole
The Loot stared at him like a black skull. Fourteen years a cop and Figano was yet to see a non-Negroid Lieutenant – even the white ones. They must have a union. His last Loot was a fat hobo with a mouth full of honey-coated razorblades. This one had a motivational poster on the wall behind him promoting “competence”. Nice to see them still aiming high in New York. The windows of this corner office were bullet-proof for just that reason, despite being on the 23rd floor, but the next threat on his life was likely to come from the officer behind the desk. “Nothing to say, smart ass?”

Figano could take an eyeballing. “Well, I didn’t eat any of him if that’s what you’re asking. Not my style. I assume that to be a grammatical failing on the part of the reporter. Or something.” He folded the rag and placed it back on the desk. The Loot grinned like a black skull with really good teeth.

“That’s so slick I might cum, you little cunt. I don’t give a care if you have killed ten esskays, you uck-fay, and I don’t care if there’s ten more on every corner from here to the Mayor’s gaping ass and you shoot every last one of them dead with your cock. This is my precinct, my city and my country and when you are in my office taking my orders you fucking had better obey them motherfuckers.” The smile slipped somewhere in the middle, but it was back up by the end of the sentence. “You understand, yes?”

“Yes, Lieutenant,” Figano said. The gleaming saliva sheets cornering the Loot’s mouth popped and he put the rictus away again, folding it up safely. He stared at the paper like he could make it catch fire.

“So, you back for five days and you make it to the front page before you even make it to dispatches. Before you even let your local brother officers know you’re back in town. It’s just a real shame you closed all your cases, isn’t it, ‘cos you ain’t going nowhere until you get another. Until you get assigned.” The Loot rapped at his desk with venom and a flat screen slid up out of the glossy surface between them, the reverse side coming to life for Figano’s benefit as he typed. “You should know never to clear your decks if you don’t want to get landlocked – or maybe you not as special a Special as you think.”

“Yeah, well. I didn’t think my boy would be coming across. Who knew?”

“If you didn’t I’m sure none of us poor fucks would have. I’m just so glad to have you here to save us from our shit I could cry.” The Loot grinned again, eyes on his side of the screen. “Yeah, this is perfect. We’ve seen an unusually high number of floaters the last few weeks. You know all about floating. Why don’t you go and see what you can... sniff out? Report to Sergeant Oliveira at the MU. But remember, Figa, they’ll all need to be more than just wet to count as serials. Now get the fuck out of here.”

Figano got up and left, his teeth buried in his tongue. Last bastard to call him that lost a finger. In the office outside he looked at the ranks of desks stretching across the floor and the Blues assigned to each one, answering phones, typing at computers. The spaces he could see were personalised, owned by the same user – or vice versa. The thought made his skin crawl. He took the elevator down to ground, went out through the public lobby past the State Department slogan – “Home of Law Enforcement”. He might be walking out the door to do his job, but he was still stuck in here, one way or the other. For now.

-


Oliveira looked like a water rat, with short greasy facial hair that covered his face like an oil slick almost to the eyes; if you spat in his face it would probably slide off without him noticing. Figano watched him striding up and down his boat in rough chop and could imagine him standing on a floating barrel without getting wet feet. He hadn’t said a dozen words on the drive between the Marine Unit HQ and the docks, but when he saw Figano knew how to handle a boat the words he wasn’t saying got a lot more friendly.

The weather off the coast was miserable. Figano studied the reports, dry inside the cabin, while former Sgt. Oliveira – boat commanders are always Captain on board, regardless of mere rank – luxuriated outside, caught between the downpour and the up spray and happy as a clam. The reports were pretty thin, times and coordinates mostly. There was a statistically reliable number of suicides to be collected daily before El Niño pounded them into fish food against the Atlantic Sea Wall. As the Loot had said, the number recently jumped for no good reason. Good reasons included smuggling fuck ups, coastal gang warfare and – occasionally – actual maritime accidents, all short-term blips on an otherwise flat line.

For an upturn to be maintained for weeks turned a blip into a beep. All of a sudden something was pouring death into the ocean faster than the petroleum industry. Figano tutted at himself: Melodrama. The numbers weren’t that high, but they were slowly increasing. It could be anything, of course, but he felt a familiar itch. There was at least the possibility – and look where we are. More Worms than Apple, these days. There was a stomp from above – Oliveira wanted him on deck. He sealed up his storm suit and tore off a strip of Clingfilm by the door, wrapping it round his head down to the nose. Let’s get wet.

Oliveira was pointing directly into the path of the floodlight, which illuminated a large area of the Sea Wall and the ocean between them and it. Squinting through the rain running over his plastic-covered eyes Figano couldn’t see anything but the big waves and the spume clouding the top of the wall.

“What have you got here?” He could hardly hear his own voice with the wind, but Oliveira focused the beam until it was a two metre white-hot circle, holding it remarkably steady. Figano could make out a dark shape lolling in the wash. Oliveira pointed him towards the stern, then guided them closer with one hand on the wheel, keeping the light on target with the other. Figano snagged it with the lasso pole, hauling it gingerly in and onto the lifting platform to clear the water. A body, of course. He brought it on board and quickly bagged it before dragging it – her – under a cover sheet and securing both firmly.

They had three more by the time the storm broke and Figano spotted the last of those himself. They came back in to offload and he stayed with the bodies to work the IDs; Oliveira went back out with a junior officer and a promise of more to work with on his return. Figano was more interested in getting a feel for the corpses, ID’ing was a cut and dry process – the computer came back with names for three of the four, addresses for two. The spare would have to be cut and dried, not in that order, being battered beyond dental or superficial recognition, no tattoos or other distinguishing. One for the table.

Figano’s itch was still itching. It got stronger when Oliveira came back with the rest of the day’s catch just after sundown. Six floaters, three broken – added to the other boats that made nineteen total. The night crews wouldn’t have a hope of spotting something as small as a dead body unless they caused it; they were out for smugglers. Any other unfortunates would have to wait for tomorrow. Oliveira joined him in the autopsy room smelling of the disinfectant showers; all nineteen were lined up on the metal.

“What d’you think, then?” he asked. Figano was just staring through the bodies as if distracted.

“There’s something here, I know that. Don’t know what yet, but you’ve definitely got something.”

“Someone, you’re saying.”

“Probably. Four a day is big numbers, though. It might be a team effort. Different fish altogether.” Oliveira nodded. Figano didn’t take his eyes off the bodies until the other man called from the door.

“Come get a drink, sailor.”

“I don’t.”

“A smoke, then, watch me, whatever. Long day, do your thinking in the morning.”

-


Three days later he had enough to be sure. Sure that the Loot wouldn’t like what he had. Oliveira and the rest of the MU crewmen were calling him Gano – for winner, after he jumped onto and took down a fleeing powder-boat singlehanded; fun distraction, but nothing more than that. The real deal was the bodies, but he wasn’t going to be tracking down the source on water and Oliveira could see that too.

-

Highly derivative material here - influences range from every cop film ever to series two of The Wire...

Noumenon
24th Jan 2008, 16:35
4 – High Places
“Good to meet you, Detective Figano, damn good to meet you!”

There are politicians and Politicians. The subtle difference lies with Money. Any elected official can give or take a bribe to get things done, but the real powers broker deals without touching an envelope. They preside over some kind of medieval barter system, tallying favours to and fro, giving advice both friendly and otherwise, balancing everything that needs to happen while conveniently achieving their own ends, coming out on top and reaping the dirty, fabulous benefits without ever tarnishing their brilliant shine.

“I’ve got to say it, I’m proud to have you back on your old turf, Detective. You’ve done this city the kind of service that can’t be bought, a real, noble, work of a man kind of thing. Well done!”

Mayor Greg Spiggert looked like a guy whose shoulder hair might wind up in your hotdog, but his voice belied a stainless steel truth – and in recent years no-one had run New York for so long without winding up as dog meat of some sort. Mayor Greg Spiggert didn’t exactly try to clean up the city, but made sure it ran smoothly without the dirt sticking to him personally, a genuine achievement. He wore his title like it was baptised onto him and even on the cheerily informal chat show circuit he was always Mayor Greg.

“Come here and shake my hand – let’s give these old vultures what they’re here for, eh? Ha ha!”

Mayor Greg Spiggert pumped his hand like he expected the floor to raise him up to Figano’s eye line, grinning a row of dazzling pearls at the flock of photographers as the cameras strobed. Two assistants better suited to a stage magician framed them in an elegant blonde glow, one holding a richly coloured mahogany case. Mayor Greg continued to chat sideways like the old friends they currently were.

“Listen – Libero, isn’t it – from up in my office I do what I can, one does, you know, but stamping out corruption and helping the little man is one thing, it’s a whole, whole other when you’re faced with something like this, something as unpredictable and unforeseeable and random as what one twisted madman will do to another, am I right? And how do you protect the little man from something like that, either? You can’t is how – not unless you have a secret weapon like Libby Figano up your sleeve, eh? Damn right! Okay, thank you, gentlemen, thank you!”

Mayor Greg Spiggert approached the mics clustered at the glass podium, waving down the calls from the press and beaming into the staring lenses. “Ladies, gentlemen, and members of the press! Ha ha, yes! I’m really just delighted to be presenting this award to a fine servant of our great nation, and this grand city in particular; a man who has many times put his life in harm’s way, who challenges the foulest opponents our sometimes dark society has spat out; who, if he’d ever been wounded in the line of duty, it would be my honour to additionally decorate – yet his competence goes beyond even that!” Mayor Greg beckoned and his beautiful assistants guided Figano forward. Figano thought of the Loot; that last accolade would mean a lot to him. One girl opened her case, the other presented the large gold key to Mayor Greg which he proudly brandished, its teeth a perfect representation of the Manhattan skyline.

“Special Detective Libero Figano does his duty without asking for recognition, decoration, or promotion, without seeking any further merit, than to be an outstanding representative of his profession – but he deserves it anyway. It makes me one proud New Yorker to be the one to hand him the key to our city.”

Mayor Greg led the applause and made his enthusiasm contagious. As the bulbs started flashing again he reached out a hand for one more shake, pulling Figano close. “You done good, Libby!” he hissed.

“Actually, there is something you could do for me, Mister Mayor,” said Figano, through his mild smile. Mayor Greg Spiggert’s fantastic grin didn’t so much as flicker.

“And after everything I’ve heard and said – how about that?” He patted Figano on the back and waved at the crowd . “Call me Mayor Greg.”

-



Lieutenant Jacob Sheppard didn’t smile back.

“Aw, come on now, Lieutenant. Everyone calls me that, try it on, you might like it!” Mayor Greg gave a friendly shrug on the flat screen and waved it off like it didn’t matter. “Anyway, surely this is academic after yesterday – freedom of the city should mean what it says, don’t you think?”

“With all due respect, Mister Mayor,” he said, “Novelty awards hardly supersede a policeman’s assigned detail.” Mayor Greg’s smile became benevolent and inclusive, welcoming Sheppard into the club.

“I don’t know if I’d call the open arms of all New York a novelty... well, that’s as may be. But Figano’s been a Special for a while now and you know what that means. You don’t think you’re superseding your authority trying to tie him down, Lieutenant?”

“Figano was put on the boats to do a job and from what I see that job is still unfinished.”

“The Detective tells me he’s got a good line on that. It’s just leading back onto dry land.”

“Serial killers!” Sheppard spat the words. “It’s always serial killers with this guy! He eats any more fries he’s going to end up looking like one. You know, it only takes three repeat kills to qualify as serial – he’s got ten.”

“Be grateful we have him, Lieutenant. Now, I think it’s time you took him off the leash, don’t you? You must have enough on your plate already, what with Captain Jefferies’ retirement coming up.” Mayor Greg Spiggert’s smile was now a complicated beast to classify. “That precinct really needs running, and I know you’d want to have as fair a chance as everyone else out there gunning for it.”

Lieutenant Jacob Sheppard didn’t smile back. “Yes, sir.”

“Good man. I’m sure I’ll be hearing much more about you very, very soon. Good morning, gentlemen.” Mayor Greg’s eye line shifted slightly. “Oh, and go get ‘em, son.” His image winked out, then the flat screen retreated into the desk leaving Figano’s view of the Loot unobstructed. The corners of his mouth twitched just slightly as they locked eyes across the desk.

“Yes, sir,” Figano said.

Lieutenant Jacob Sheppard didn’t smile back.5 – The Man
He came to abruptly, like a man drowsing in a tub of cooling water, gradually slipping under the surface, then with a tautening of the abdomen hinging back into the air. He didn’t sit up, just felt the warmth breathing gently over him, then reached up to the soft ceiling and touched the top switch in the dark, first time by body-memory; the air-con started to blow cold.

With both hands now he reached up for the padded handles, lifted himself off the mattress; it slithered away like a spongy caterpillar track and after the warning chime a mist of anti-bacterial filled the air. He lowered himself to the plastic rollers and rubbed down quickly, then tugged the handles again for the spray rinse, listening to the water slurping away beneath him.

A rough towel dropped onto his face and the air-con rose to a hard hot wind, whining loudly as he dried himself. He tossed the damp towel and kicked out at the door. It hinged open upwards, letting in a low amber glow from the safety lights in the corridor. He reached down for the grab-bar and with a heave slid himself over the rollers and out.

He stood naked in the corridor, no movement from the red-lit sound-proofed cubicles to either side. He tapped in his code on the key pad and the locker-safe over his cubicle opened. He pulled on his shorts, socks and coveralls, slipped on and strapped his boots, then grabbed his bag and jacket and closed the locker. It beeped and the cubicle door closed – the green VACANT light popped on as he headed for the elevator.

All the automated hostel’s lights were set low. Outside it was already night and chilly. The man shrugged into his jacket and rolled on a tight cotton hat, down over his ears. Then he shouldered his bag and went on the hunt.

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On reflection I think that this and the previous material constitutes a Chapter One, rather than five short chapters - I don't really want to be compared to Dan Brown even as a joke. Any thoughts or opinions would be welcomed.

amner
24th Jan 2008, 16:53
Nou, man, this is awesome. Get the fucker out there and published.

Colyngbourne
24th Jan 2008, 17:01
I'll catch up with the latest chapters as soon as I can, Nou - but it sounds as if they're brill.