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Noumenon
17th Feb 2007, 1:46
Twelve pages hand writ parchment, found rolled within a steel baton itself within a masked compartment of an antique Vargueño desk of fine design and craftsmanship.My good, beloved friend.

I wonder who shall actually read my words. I write in the hope that it be you, even against all chance, unless as I die chance will once again side with me and change my life anew. How long it will be before you, whoever you are, see these pages again!

I was never an historian. My brother showed something of an interest in his youth but life in the present proved the more interesting and, as one might say, he never looked back. I have always had a love of literature and yet had never read the classics, nor works of historical fiction, but returned time and again to those products of fantastical imaginations who spent their own lives always looking forward in speculation.

Thus it was not in my character to dally over tattered pages found in antique draws, but on discovering exactly such a thing something in the sight slowed my hand. I took them into my jacket before the ancient piece was consigned to hammer and flames and gave them some study that very evening, putting aside several promising reads-in-progress to do so. That, perhaps, is my one true regret. (Hah! No man lies to himself so well as an old one. Except perhaps a young one!)

In any case I at first found myself rewarded – it seemed this message from the past was more to my usual tastes than I should have expected. Such things it claimed no man in his right mind could credit as fact, but there was a passion to the words which held my eye despite the torturous and archaic language and the poor condition of the page. Indeed, each one seemed to decay noticeably as I put them aside, the edges flaking and ink receding into the yellowed parchment; I ceased to stack them for fear of crushing the bottommost and by the time I reached the signature on the final page the several sheets lay arranged around me on my bedspread like the cards of some obscure game. My mind was a whirl of chaotic thought, stirred by what I had read.

It was as I lay in contemplation of those words that all reality was wiped away and I found myself falling in blackness, with all the stars of the universe shining above me. I gasped at their beauty, when my breath was struck from me by my landing and in pain and shock I remember no more. My next recollection has me standing on the bank of the Thames – the grass bank, mind you, London’s lights no more than a failing amber haze, and distant! I had lived on its borders for years but now the clear starlight picked out only fields, hills and trees framing the silver thread of our great river. No sound broke the stillness and a strange flavour filled the air that I no longer retain the distinction of, having lived without its predecessor now for so many years.

Of course at first I took it for a dream. But when truly faced with the inconceivable one’s sense of reality is undeniable and in taking stock of myself in this place I was overcome with a terrible depression. Not only my family, my friends, my possessions, but my entire world was gone. Why, I had evidently left my very home into mid-air itself! The coldness of the breeze awoke me from this pitiable state of mind; in only undershirt and johns – hah! see what time and circumstance will do to a man? “Track trousers” and a short-sleeved shirt left my arms and feet bare and quite chill. I did not fear for my life from the elements, but my heart surely raced at my predicament.

Need I, indeed should I render it into bold clarity for you? What will be the result if you straightforwardly dismiss my words too as those of a madman and put aside this page unfinished? Why, at that instant had I not minutes before considered the same of another, who wrote a letter now abandoned to an existence wholly lost to me; what would I be, and where, had I done as much? No; I shall come to that in time.

First, I resolved to find London again and hope against my private certainty that I was merely victim of some cunning prank at the hands of friends (regretfully now largely forgotten). I set off along the bank glad of the soft grass under my bare feet, but when dawn broke some hours later I found myself still some considerable distance from my destination; indeed I had less idea of its position than I had when darkness framed its glow clearly. Instead I was drawn by the sight and sound of what seemed to me so uncommon then and so familiar now: a horse-drawn cart, driven by its master along a roughly rutted carriageway. I hailed him from a distance and reached ahead of his course. He was rightly suspicious and found my speech and indecent dress most odd, but at my claim to be victim of beating, robbery, kidnap and escape he was somewhat satisfied – all this done on my part at the prompting of my “literary benefactor”.

Forgive my sourness, but though the many details of that fateful letter have fallen from my memory since that day, some things remain and the awareness of advice given to facilitate my immediate survival is one such. In that moment would I have preferred no advice and no damned letter; indeed! Nevertheless those words kept me alive that day and no doubt saw me through many more, so I should give thanks for what resources I had at my disposal. For: what if this experience had been always to happen and was not the cursed effect of that letter? Would I have died that very day and not lived to write my own words here?

Instead of a quick death I found instead relief for tired legs and bruised feet. The cart driver was the man of a local farmer and willing to aid me to his destination, a small market township some ten miles further down this path. He found my spectacles most noteworthy and presumed me to be a scholar, too due to my less than robust physique. This I failed to confirm, claiming instead ignorance of my situation due to a blow on the head and that I had been wandering some days without food or direction – more advice followed. This he found quite exciting and at my prompting was good enough to reveal much information concerning my new environment. On our arrival several hours later he was proud to be the literal barer of news to the town and I was much observed and remarked upon as I helped him unload his goods by way of payment.

To blazes – I tire of my secret. I resided in The Past. Some many, many years before my own birth, perhaps five times my own age at that time! Even as I write this now, at the end of my life, I could likely be born and die again before the date of my true birth came to pass; but some details I shall not share here, for reasons still to be revealed.

I spent the day working alongside my rescuer, whose name I recall was Thomas; it had been some years since my last labouring work but I had always enjoyed profitable exercise and he furnished me with much information, far more valuable to me then than coins. As dusk came on he offered me still more: transportation to his master’s properties and an introduction, which I accepted gratefully. It was fully dark when our journey was done and his master not to be disturbed, so I was put up in the hayloft of the barn above my other companion of that most uncommon day – the carthorse.

I did sleep sound, but not before pursuing thoughts equally deep. With no knowledge of the mechanism by which my circumstance came to pass (for such was absent from the letter) I had no means by which to reverse my fate. What then? It seemed to me there were two paths. Firstly, to hide myself from history in the hope that all those events of my natural past should occur again untampered with, though success would certainly ensure a repeat of that which saw me itching and horse-smelling but most gratefully warm. Secondly, but more questionable, to live my life, wherever it took me, as I had in my now distant future and for which I had evidently reaped a reward.

My decision rang clear in my mind: to Live. It has not been my nature to duck down my head when troubled by thought or adversity and I would sooner be damned than to see this change. Of course I had read of many speculations upon the subject of time travel – the pollution of one’s own future by action taken in the past one “presently” occupies; the possibility of one’s own erasure; all manner of paradoxical happenings which might ensue. Still, my mind was made – come the dawn I would act with all the freedom I had ever, and if to do so meant my certain death then I was in no worse a situation than any other human being born before or yet to be. I conceived that should any act in my life to come result in the nullification of my own birth, my retrospective disappearance would be immediate in any case, so I closed my eyes in the knowledge that dawn would be my judge and could rule on the matter of my continued existence without further testimony. If dreams came that night I was never less aware of them.

The next morning I attended Thomas’s master and secured rude work as his man, putting to bed once and for all any concerns I may have harboured over the slow vanishing of my hands. My first objective, to craft a healthy form with which to face the challenges set me by the universe at large. I offered myself to any physical task felt appropriate for no more than food and board, with the proviso that should a full year pass to the master’s satisfaction I be given the opportunity to prove a greater worth to him; he accepted, and so I found myself in the employ of a landed gentleman (who shall remain nameless within these pages). Thomas I named truly, for gratitude; and in the knowledge that he died well liked and loved but childless; and that, in frank fairness, he was a man of small desires, small needs and small effect upon the world.

My first year, according to any chronology but that of my own body, was a hard but most rewarding one. The softness of my former life was carved from me ruthlessly, starting at the palms but swiftly reshaping the rest of me similarly. In that time too my knowledge of much of the nature of that world was gained, from the working and care of livestock, to the labour of the field, household and workshop. When the calendar completed its cycle no thing but my spectacles, most treasured possession, remained as it had been on my arrival. My body was strong and lean, while my clothes – had they the robustness of those manufactured locally – would have hung from me like the sail from the mast; in fact their remains had long since passed through the pigs and now fertilised some corner of my master’s fields. I was in many ways a new man.

My status as novelty served to keep me in the master’s occasional company through this period, an opportunity to demonstrate the strength and range of my mind which, without flattery, was considerably greater than that of any typical man of the time. When the end of our arrangement came we spoke candidly, and I took the opportunity to share with him the plans which I had spent the intervening period formulating. Though I was prepared to take them with me onto the road as I resumed my belated course for the capital, it had not escaped me that to begin them with sponsorship in place would lend swiftness to the enterprise, and as I fully intended to secure a rare fortune for myself there would be profits to share. I am proud to say that, after a lesser delay of several weeks, I was sent on my way by carriage as a partner in business, well dressed, with a purse of moneys and a veritable sheaf of letters of introduction to colleagues and acquaintances of high standing in society. I was given use of the good man’s town house – he was my master no longer – and permission to register such companies as I saw fit to the address. We shook hands warmly on my departure.

I wonder if I shall appear in the histories of the future; certainly, as I write this I am known by many of importance for my achievements, and though I never aspired to a position of government I have had a hand in remedying many maladies of our society – perhaps because I did not! I did not keep my given name, though my reprehensible lack of interest in the past meant that any I picked would have gone unrecognised by my younger self. Nor shall I share here that which I selected in its stead – however, I will briefly summarise those achievements made in the years which followed.

Though I initiated several concerns in those fledgling days, like many others I made my fortune through trade, first via the fleets of others and in time though purchasing my own from those with less foresight or good fortune than myself. With my partner in mind, I purchased many varieties of crop with which to seed his lands, including Hemp – with the division of Britain from the Americas this marvellous materials plant made my second fortune as a rival for the cotton trade, generating much revenue for country and crown, thus earning me my knighthood. Having arrived in the past with no small interest in the genus myself I took the liberty of experimenting, generating many unusual breeds; following an encounter with an insular but earnest gentleman named Darwin I invited him to view these strains and I flatter myself his interest was quite piqued.

If you will allow me an aside – let me assure you that I have not remained celibate. Given even the lesser multitude of the earth’s peoples by comparison to those of my original time, the possibility of fathering my own line is statistically too remote to consider, despite the many questions which might stand answered regarding my appearance. In any case, a discrete withdrawal at the correct juncture has always prevailed; indeed, a brief “fountaining” proved a popular and entertaining alternative to nine months of discomfort amongst those willing ladies fortunate enough to make my acquaintance, as well as many years of blissful penury for myself. To continue.

As the years caught up with him my partner’s sons took over his involvement with our businesses and upon his passing I found he had made allowance for me in his will, bolstering my fortune significantly with his own. I began to provide financial aid for public education and health also lending my support to the nationalisation of various industries and services. I sponsored a wide range of scientific and other endeavours and was the founding chair of the Royal Society for Secular Ethics, a seat I retained until my own retirement to the country and the gentleman’s club these three years past. I departed public life confident I had worked many a positive change upon it.

There have been few things which I turned my hand to that I considered to have failed and I have had the liberty to try many. Though I did not enter the past with plans and desires concerning it, I was a child of my time and finding myself cast adrift did not erase the marks which my prior life had made upon my thoughts. It was only two evenings past when I began to pen this which you now hold, prompted by a night of conversation in the club with several friends and some former rivals of my heyday.

I found myself looking around at the weathered faces of that room and seeing my own in them, drawn in the smoke curling from pipe and cigar and reflected in each glass of wine or brandy swirled and supped upon. We are all old men, I considered, no longer that which we were in our distant youth, and the world too is a place much changed. Now, for the first time in many years a memory from my lost, so unreal life struck me and I coughed loudly to mask laughter, of course attracting the attention of all present.

“Who would have thought thirty years ago we would all be sitting here… drinking the finest wine and spirit and smoking such as this, eh?” This I asked the room. “Aye,” came the unified reply. Shortly, one of my fellows in some concern had a boy call for me a cab and I was conveyed to my residence in the town, still short of breath as I was escorted to the door and thence to my chambers. I found myself unable to sleep however, indeed I have not rested well since; I have been instead confined myself to my home, writing this document, while also thinking as well as I am able on that other which I read so many years ago, so many years ahead of that in which I now reside.

Perhaps the reason for my distress is unclear. I confessed openly that I would act in denial of any notions of temporal responsibility, a decision I considered upheld by my continued existence; but what is the implication? Have I changed the nature of my own future, which is to say my own past? Have my decisions altered the society I was born into for good or ill; greatly, slightly, or not even at all? Perhaps, no, almost certainly that which caused me such discomfort will mean nothing to you! The things I have done, the changes I can only guess at making – perhaps I have slain the Python before it ever slithered into the light! Defeated Hinkle before he was even conceived! And myself – though I live to write this, what chance that I will ever be born into my own future? That you will be the one to read this?

I recall not the name of he who heralded me to my strange existence, but I do assert that he too addressed himself in that terrible, fateful correspondence. Yet it was I who received it and received that same fate. Are he and I the same? Are we forever to spin around ourselves and not progress with the rest of humanity, or are we merely links in a chain of souls, to be either torn from or thrust into their rightful places?

Or, an alternative; maybe I did not depart into my own past but into some other world entirely, some place where wholly different paths shall be followed by all people, and the person I am was never to live at all! If the truth of reality is the infinite multitude, a space where all things and no things may come to pass equally, then as I edge towards death I do so satisfied that I have spread my wings and lived to the fullest extent.

All I can say with certainty is this: I have striven to work for the betterment of this world; and, should by reading these words your turn upon the same wheel come to pass, may you find in these pages some meagre degree of preparation for the trails which lie in store.

Yours, in the hope of a sweet future for all mankind, and a rich, full life for you,

...The Author's Name

Colyngbourne
17th Feb 2007, 9:32
Since I'm about to disappear on hols, I haven't time to read this now - but definitely will when I return!

Noumenon
17th Feb 2007, 16:11
This is very much a first draft here, I only finished it half an hour before posting it up, but I would always hope for honest criticism regardless of that detail - all opinions are more than welcome, harsh or otherwise.

wshaw
19th Feb 2007, 22:16
Like it; it's sort of MR James meets Isaac Asimov. There's a lovely twist at the end of the first third when you realise that the writer is actually an anachronism from the modern world, who wears a track suit. The concept that then unfolds is great... but I think you could do it a little more justice.

You may not want to, but you could make it a good deal easier to read by giving it more detail. The style of language slows things down. I think you have to be careful with archaic language... a little goes a long way.

But the other stylistic device that slows it is that everything is seen second-hand, very much through the writer's eyes. More direct speech, observation and incident would make it a little livelier, and doesn't have to detract from the idea of it being an old document. Also the fact that there are no characters in the piece makes it hard to engage with.

But for me the main problem was I found it really hard to tell into which time the narrator had fallen. The language seemed so archaic that I thought he'd fallen into Tudor times, so it was a bit of a shock when the name Darwin cropped up. Again, I think more detail would help here... so that the reader could guess the time period even before the narrator knew where he was. I suspect that's a research thing...

But I guess it's a conceptual piece; Ray Bradbury's "The Sound Of Thunder" already did the time travel paradox thing. I think you're edging towards something more at the end with the narrator stumbling on the idea that he may have created a separate quantum universe through his actions, but I think you can play with that a little more. Maybe there's room for another twist at the end? Having set up such a great world, I think you can muck about with the concept even more towards the end.

leyla
20th Feb 2007, 9:37
Nou, I'll read this later when I have enough time to give it the attention it deserves. From first glance, I am amazed at your versatility - this is the polar opposite of the witty ditties you are so adept at scribbling. A dark (and hairy) horse indeed

Noumenon
26th Feb 2007, 17:56
I think you could do it a little more justice.Almost certainly! You could make it a good deal easier to read by giving it more detail. The style of language slows things down. I think you have to be careful with archaic language... a little goes a long way.So you mean, "more narrative detail while in a less fussy language", yes? One of my early thoughts was to have the style evolve towards a far more modern English (even more modern than that which I use, bordering on Chav-like) the further into the story the writer goes, as if he becomes more like his lost younger self - but then I made the writer into myself instead and that kind of fell away. Maybe that would be a good variation, to have the over-precise language actually devolve into street slang by the end.More direct speech, observation and incident would make it a little livelier, and doesn't have to detract from the idea of it being an old document. Also the fact that there are no characters in the piece makes it hard to engage with.:oops: The very first idea I came up with when thinking about the story was to turn the whole thing into an excuse to play out Monty Python's Four Yorkshiremen sketch, where I was the only one in the know but by the end all participants were pissing themselves. The letter was basically going to end on that note but I found myself enjoying it as a (slightly) more serious story so I stripped that down to just a mention, although I was never planning to transcribe the whole thing by any means. I suppose Thomas and his nameless Master would be the logical nominees for speaking roles currently.The language seemed so archaic that I thought he'd fallen into Tudor times, so it was a bit of a shock when the name Darwin cropped up. Again, I think more detail would help here... so that the reader could guess the time period even before the narrator knew where he was. I suspect that's a research thing... Reeee-suuur-Chaah? You're right of course but I'm a shocker for that kind of effort (my Gf sometimes calls me a "lazybone" and she's not far off). Useful to know when you placed it, and it is an interesting idea about the guessing aspect. I had also tried to come up with a logic for the narrator's omisions, such as his own pseudonym - if it was to prevent the next person in the chain from erasing him and everything he does, for example. Failed to do so though, and presumably him putting the name in the letter would prevent exactly that!I think you're edging towards something more at the end with the narrator stumbling on the idea that he may have created a separate quantum universe through his actions, but I think you can play with that a little more. Maybe there's room for another twist at the end? Having set up such a great world, I think you can muck about with the concept even more towards the end.I was staring at that paragraph and wishing there was more than just that little taster in the story. Something to develop there for sure. EDIT: However, I have a little something lined up to do beforehand: my next post to Features, inspired by the Oh, Whistle... story linked to on the Ghost Stories (http://palimpsest.org.uk/forum/showthread.php?t=2771) thread, will also be a salute to the Palimp...

Thanks for the feedback. More is invited from any and all interested parties.

(and hairy)Spooky, have we actually met?

Colyngbourne
26th Feb 2007, 19:15
Finally read this, Nou - very enjoyable. I tend to agree with wshaw's points re action or activity, as well as referred thoughts, and certain archaisms - draw, 'no thing': I was uncertain of the time period - I was thinking mid-late C17th personally until the mention of Darwin and the gents gathering at the club.

I spotted the anachronistic style of writing somewhat before the track-trousers moment: there was a good clue in the word 'speculation' to tell us what kind of story we were reading, and the phrase 'reads-in-progress' is a late C20th-ism, I suspect! Generally I thought there was a little over-egging of the olde language, which made my eye want to skim a little.

But the concept - :-D I like it very much, as I like A Sound of Thunder (though the detail of what happens there with the man's actions made me as a reader really queasy at the thought of the consequences). For a moment, when there was the scene in the club, I half-suspected that the other old fellows there were going to admit to being cast back in time too (or something bizarre of that sort).

leyla
2nd Mar 2007, 7:13
Sorry it's taken me so long to read this, Nou. I'm glad I did because I really enjoyed it. I always have to concentrate when reading archaic language, but once I was into it, I found it intriguing and well written.
Wshaw and Col have already made helpful comments. The only extra point I might add is that as well as dialogue to lighten the tone, perhaps more on the subject of his love life might catch the reader's interest. I wanted to learn more about the women he'd had relationships with, and to find out if he had developed feelings for any of them or if it was more a sexual release thing.
But all in all, I'm very impressed. It merges some very different themes and styles (time travel, metaphysics, philosophy, historical language). If you developed it further, maybe you could elaborate on the narrator's dilemma about whether to embark on action that might change the course of history and thus possibly jeapordise his own future birth: perhaps he could be shown to be facing some such dilemma by meeting his own ancestors and thus having an opportunity to marry someone an ancestor would otherwise have married or somesuch.
It would also be interesting to learn more about the letter he read which initially plunged him into the past - who was it by? Why did he cascade into the past? Could the letter have been written by a future descendant of his? You've got the opportunity to really play with concepts of destiny and time.

So - great story. Do post up any longer or changed version, I'd love to read it.

Colyngbourne
2nd Mar 2007, 9:38
I was thinking that it was the narrator's own letter that he was reading - a kind of time-loop paradox thing.

Noumenon
2nd Mar 2007, 12:18
I wanted to learn more about the women he'd had relationships with, and to find out if he had developed feelings for any of them or if it was more a sexual release thing.Ah. I'd forgotten, but at the start I say "my one true regret" is the unfinished books left behind, then call myself a liar. This was intended to be in regards to my semi-recent female acquisition (uh-uh-oh-oh), whom it would be a real shame to lose this quickly. However, I never return to the subject and the passage you refer to would be the ideal place to do so.

...perhaps he could be shown to be facing some such dilemma by meeting his own ancestors and thus having an opportunity to marry someone an ancestor would otherwise have married or somesuch.I'm in a bit of a quandry over some details of this story. For example, I feel its "unfair" for me to do research into the past because if all this happened to me right now I wouldn't have that oportunity (great excuse for avoiding research, natch) - therefore the question is: how would I know who my ancestors were to avoid them? My mum has done some uprooting of the family tree, but short of avoiding all H's in Bolton and all C's everywhere else I'd be adrift.

Of course the reverse of this is that research would almost certainly make for a better story. I could nail down all those historical details, obviously something I would be able to do if I found myself in the past, living my research. So I suppose I ought to do some. It would also be interesting to learn more about the letter he read which initially plunged him into the past - who was it by?I was thinking that it was the narrator's own letter that he was reading - a kind of time-loop paradox thing.Two options: one, that I am stuck in a loop, writing letters to myself as an old man and reading them as a young one; two, that I am part of a chain of letters, each written by someone else, each causing the new reader to undergo the same fate. I'm not sure which I prefer, but as it says in the story there is no way for me to know which is the case.

Perhaps what "I" need is a confidant with whom to discuss what has happened. But my feeling is that it would become a different story and not suitable for this "letter" format. I will have a think on all these responses though, and thanks.

Flutty
6th Mar 2007, 20:46
Maybe that would be a good variation, to have the over-precise language actually devolve into street slang by the end.:oops:

No.

This is a man writing his story after living for 30 years, starting in the 1860s -- from some of your hints. His style should have evolved to be that of his "new" time. Perhaps you should drop some modernisms into the writing just to reflect it has been an incomplete transformation. He is still a modern man writing in the accent of his times.

This is an important element to the piece. The style confused me, I knew it was done for reason, and it all became clear at the end.

Noumenon
6th Mar 2007, 21:04
Ah - thanks for that too! Always good to nip a bad idea in the bud...